yes, it is I think dropping the bass like the drums is a good idea. sounds like you bring it in with volume just drop it. I heard a guitar very low I think that sound should be louder as well. good stuff man. check my showcase the last beat has a vocal in it
sounding good the vocal is a little muddy I would get it a little higher end with a sweep and I would drop the drums hard not bring them in slowly with more volume.
@DJ Excellence your beat is nice but something off, listening to the original I feel it has more swing more offbeat sounds that just allow for offbeat rapping. good stuff tho
still needs a good mix. overall idea is good. mix mix mix and you got something bring the drums up especially the snare maybe add some verb or delay to it. the snare that is. keep going man